Monday, November 17, 2014

free verse poem: a seed

A new belief
just like a seed
water it and
see how it then
grows
plant it among
others of its kind
see how it prospers
watch and see
it flourish and find
color.
The wind will blow
and try to sway
those new found beliefs
but the roots are
spread down deep
and it finds faith
in their
strength.
though seasons change
and cold times
come around.
The new colors
mean nothing but
new growth
slowly
as it becomes
big enough to
prosper.
small fruits of
faith and new life
are spread under
its leaves
and new belief
begins again
just like a seed.

1)I need to extend some of the stanzas and line by line needs refinement. Also, I need to look at the order and structure of the stanzas. I need to focus on diction and explore on some of my ideas.

A new belief
 a seed
water it
and see how it
grows
plant it among
others of its kind
see how it
prospers
watch and see
it flourish and find
color.
The wind will blow
and try to sway
those new found beliefs
droughts will come
and leaves will
fall
but the roots are
spread down
deep
and it finds faith
in their
strength.
though seasons change
and frost
comes around.
The different colors
mean nothing but
new growth.
slowly, it becomes
big enough to
prosper.
more seeds come forth
buds become small
fruits of faith
and new life
they spread under its leaves
and new life
begins again
a seed.

2) I still need to extend on some ideas and change the diction in certain areas to make it more meaningful. Also I need to separate the stanzas. Add title.

A seed

A new belief 
 a seed
water it
and see how it
grows.
plant it among
others of its kind
see how it
prospers.
watch and see
it flourish and find
color.

The wind will blow
and try to sway
those new found beliefs
droughts will come
and leaves will
fall.

But the roots are
spread down
deep
and it finds faith
in their
strength.
though seasons change
and frost
comes around.
The different colors
mean nothing but
new growth.

Slowly, it becomes
big enough to
prosper.
more seeds come forth
buds become small
fruits of faith
and new ideas
they spread under its leaves.
They cover
and take over
all the grass
and dirt around.
and new life
begins again
a seed.

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